Long time ago, there was an old man who felt lonely so when he had done his daily jobs, he spent time on a scanning the night sky. It took so much time to count the stars. One day, he noticed that one star is missing. Just then he heard footsteps of someone. It was a orphan boy called Kileken who traveled countless footsteps. The man was so excited because he felt lonely every day but thinking of living with Kileken, he felt really happy. However, that boy had a secret power that surprised and make the old man curiosity every work Kileken did. The old man was so curiosity what he did and considered to know about it or not. Suddenly, the dark evil shadow came to him and made him plotted to be known what the boy did every day for working.
The next day, Kileken woke up, the old man pretended to be asleep. Then, when Kileken got out for chores, the man followed him at safety distance and watched what the boy was doing. Suddenly, when the boy used his power, the man freeze and watched that phenomenon. However, his cry of wonder escaped out from his mouth, Kileken turned and look at him instantly. In sudden time, the boy burst up to the sky and disappeared and become the blind star. Everything what Kileken did was gone and animals became scraggly. After that, by the man’s silly mistake of decision, he felt lonely again and had to regain to his tired daily jobs.
You were really good at summarizing the story. People might know what happened in this story, even though they read this passage before. In addition, you seperated the paragraphs well.
ReplyDeleteI can understand easily to read you summary. Other friends would know too. And I like your sentences. ........... BYE
ReplyDeleteWell done! I like the way you write the story. You are thinking deep enough to look very deeply in. (Like: "when he had done his daily jobs, he spent time on a scanning the night sky") You can catch up anything in any person's view and it's good, but just be careful how you use it. i hope you keep up the good work!
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